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Fantastic! Kept my interest the whole way ... unsettling, hinting at the supernatural but never confirming, a less-than-forthcoming narrator - very well done! (And thanks for the link to the interesting true story that inspired you!)

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Wow, thank you!

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Typos build character.

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Oh shoot, I thought I got all of those! What did I miss?

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No typos — meant as a friendly jocular remark in response to comment you made. To expound, typos are just a part of the process and I think there's a tendency among many authors (yo included) to strive for a textual perfection that can inhibit creative flow. In any case, nice work.

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My bad! And yes, that's true. I'll freely admit to being a perfectionist.

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Great writing! You've got the short story form perfected, not that my opinion matters, but jeez ... well done! (And you've made me use two exclamation marks.)

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Wow, thank you!

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This hits hard. It was not only unsettling but when you then included the inspiration, it was even more haunting.

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Very good! Haunting.

And interesting inspo pickup

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beautiful and haunting!

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First story of yours I've read, and it won't be the last ❤️

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Loved this piece. Rather ironic that she killed her brother as he was their father's favourite and wanted to receive more of his love but still her brother in death was in the way- that's how I interpreted it anyway.

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Exactly!

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Very nice! Much better than mine. I like the classic feel of this and your style is absolutely divine!

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Thank you!

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