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Erica Sloan's avatar

Fantastic! Kept my interest the whole way ... unsettling, hinting at the supernatural but never confirming, a less-than-forthcoming narrator - very well done! (And thanks for the link to the interesting true story that inspired you!)

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

Wow, thank you!

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Andy Futuro's avatar

Typos build character.

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

Oh shoot, I thought I got all of those! What did I miss?

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Andy Futuro's avatar

No typos — meant as a friendly jocular remark in response to comment you made. To expound, typos are just a part of the process and I think there's a tendency among many authors (yo included) to strive for a textual perfection that can inhibit creative flow. In any case, nice work.

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

My bad! And yes, that's true. I'll freely admit to being a perfectionist.

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Graeme Hague's avatar

Great writing! You've got the short story form perfected, not that my opinion matters, but jeez ... well done! (And you've made me use two exclamation marks.)

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

Wow, thank you!

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

This hits hard. It was not only unsettling but when you then included the inspiration, it was even more haunting.

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Jon T's avatar

Very good! Haunting.

And interesting inspo pickup

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EJ Trask's avatar

beautiful and haunting!

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Stephen Duffy's avatar

First story of yours I've read, and it won't be the last ❤️

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Jason Duck's avatar

Loved this piece. Rather ironic that she killed her brother as he was their father's favourite and wanted to receive more of his love but still her brother in death was in the way- that's how I interpreted it anyway.

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

Exactly!

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Ken Flyingheart's avatar

Very nice! Much better than mine. I like the classic feel of this and your style is absolutely divine!

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Leigh Parrish's avatar

Thank you!

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