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Pam Voss, CHPC's avatar

Saw this as you’d submitted on another’s site. What an amazing story. Held me from the beginning. Well done! I just put up my very first short story, a metaphor of sorts. If you happen on over to read it, I’d love any feedback. I’m new here in Substack, but already loving it! Keep up the good work! Will you continue with this, as in a book? Just curious. I’d definitely buy it😉.

Evelyn K. Brunswick's avatar

Masterfully done. Only says what needs to be said and lets the reader fill in the rest from the suggestions. That's the sort of writing I love both reading and writing myself. I read your other one 'Grave Goods' earlier and that was similar - masterful use of suggestion.

Although I have such a ridiculously massive TBR pile (thanks to the MV2 lol), I will have to add your entire archive to it. So I very much appreciate your mentioning of previous stories in your monthly updates - have loved all of them so far.

And yes, WW1 was horrific, as was the white feathers. It's even worse from my own feminist perspective thinking about how most of the suffragettes joined in with forcefully handing out the white feathers. They should be ashamed.

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