this was a really interesting idea and the minute by minute countdown was great for tension but i was confused by the ending despite reading it a couple of times. is she a ghost... is she trapped by a ghost... who is the other "she"... i felt unable to grasp the full effect of the story because i couldnt work out quite what was going on. possibly more my problem than anything in the writing. some things are not obvious even when they stare you in the face.
No worries. Ashley is definitely a ghost. As for the other "she", I decided to leave that ambiguous. But you do get just a glimpse of her before Ethan is sent running. 🙂
What an excellent use of a countdown for suspense.
Absolutely stunning. Gut wrenching take on the classic ghost story. I want him to succeed, and I don't know what that means.
this was a really interesting idea and the minute by minute countdown was great for tension but i was confused by the ending despite reading it a couple of times. is she a ghost... is she trapped by a ghost... who is the other "she"... i felt unable to grasp the full effect of the story because i couldnt work out quite what was going on. possibly more my problem than anything in the writing. some things are not obvious even when they stare you in the face.
No worries. Ashley is definitely a ghost. As for the other "she", I decided to leave that ambiguous. But you do get just a glimpse of her before Ethan is sent running. 🙂
So glad you won the award. This is a great story!
Thanks, Laura!
A well deserved victory!
Great story!
Excellent! Loved it. Thanks for sharing.
beautiful scary story!
Ooo. That description of the hand coming out the lake was 👌
Fantastic and heartbreaking. I hope Ethan comes up with a plan to free Ashley. And…I want to know more about what was in the lake!
Thank you!